雅思寫作修改一例
2014-12-25 16:23:45留學(xué)網(wǎng)整理
改前：
The view that TV can bring us more advantages has shown itself to be true throughout these years. This is not to say that televisions are not of disadvantages for human being， in fact， they have caused a lot of trouble. But it has been proven that TV is now playing a very important part in our li123 For instance， it can keep us in formed about current events， instructive and entertaining.
From the TV shows， we can follow the late developments in science and politics. A lot of television programs introduce people to things they have never thought of before and never heard of before. Also， it can provide life broadcast of the important sport matches， allow us to know the newest result of football leagues in every country. As a result， people all over the world are no longer distant and isolated from each other. The most distant countries and strangest customs are brought right into one’s sitting room.
TV provides enormous possibilities fro education like school programs via closed-circuit television. TV provides special broadcasts for those in TV university， or open university. It also offers specialized subjects like language teaching， sewing， cooking， painting， cosmetics， etc.
TV is not only a convenient source of entertainment， but also a comparatively cheap one. On watching the varied relaxed programs， people can release themselves， so that that can continue with the new work mettlesomely.
In summary， Although TV does many benefits for people nowadays， don’t waste so much time on it， and select the ones which can do you a favour.
改后
It is generally agreed that TV can benefit its audience. This is not to say that watching TV programs is of no disadvantages for us; in fact， TV programs have caused a lot of troubles to us. But there is no doubt that TV is playing an increasingly important role in our li123 For instance， TV can keep us informed， can be instructive， and can be entertaining.
TV exists to inform its audience. A lot of TV programs expose us to the things that we have never thought of or heard of. For example， by watching TV， we can follow the latest developments in science， politics， and sports. The news broadcasted by BBC， the world largest broadcasting company， informs us of the latest technical breakthroughs and the current political affairs; TV provides live broadcasts of important matches， allowing us to know the newest results of football leagues in every country. By watching TV， people across the world are no longer distant and isolated from each other， and the most distant countries and strangest customs are brought right into one’s living room.
In addition to its informing effect， TV can also be instructive. This is especially true in view of the enormous educational opportunities TV provides. Via closed-circuit televisions， or through public televisions， TV provides special broadcasts of educational programs such as language teaching， sewing， cooking， painting， and cosmetics for those who are interested. The educational function of TV is one of the factors that make it increasingly popular.
TV is not only informing and instructive but also entertaining. Undoubtedly， TV is the most appropriate source by which we are looking for entertainments. If one is a music fun， he or she can stay at home and watch a lot of free musical performances on TV; if one is interested in celebrities， he or she can watch the late-night shows on TV and have a “visual dating” with his or her idols. The entertaining effect of TV is another factor that adds to its popularity.
The informing， instructive， and entertaining effects of TV make this broadcasting means increasingly popular. But， for your good， don’t fall in love with TV as watching it can often be a waste of time.
